Score: 3

"welll.. its something"

submission: Fight 2 flash

date: June 16, 2009

clearly this isn't the most impressive flash. amateur drawings, basic, cliche premise, etc. but i will say you have a decent understanding of shadow, perspective, and overall camera work which the average animator trying to make a flash like this shows no knowledge of. so uh, its decent. the flash could still stand to be improved in, well, everything. but youve got something to start on. right now it seems more like an outline for an actual decent flash. (besides the lack of plot that is.)

keep trying.

Score: 8

"You really pulled it off... for the most part."

submission: The Dream Collab

date: May 10, 2009

As soon as the main menu, you really established what you seemed to be going for, and I was practically sold already. It definitely has that artsy-fartsy look as you call it, which i totally dug right away. But when I actually watched it, I kind of went back and forth with my opinion, because some parts really stuck to that original idea, and nailed it, while others (ahem, turtleco) kinda killed the mood for me. Especially that thing with the xbox 360... way too.. i dunno materialistic and light hearted i guess. totally lacked the weird, the creepy, the trippy, or the artsy qualities of most of the other parts. i guess you cant really get around the way styles are going to vary in a collab, but having them at least be on the same page is pretty important to me. so i give you a big fat 5 for most of the collab, but a 2 for the inconsistent parts. so thats more or less a 4 overall. aka an 8/10.

Score: 7

"Nice!"

submission: HOUSE MD animated

date: March 24, 2009

I like it. Mostly. Taking a comedic turn on an already pretty absurd (if strangely addictive) show is a good concept to start with. However, you made one fatal mistake: your portrayal of house. while you got the other characters down fairly well (in a comedic way), your house doesnt look anywhere near him, doesnt sound even close to him, and, perhaps most sadly at all, at no points takes advantage of the brooding and mysterious side of house that could be a comedy goldmine. your house is just far too upbeat, fix that and the humor value will go way up.

also, you need a preloader. it just aint right without one.

Score: 4

"Way up there on the disappointing scale"

submission: Foxtrot: F.O.B. - 101

date: March 18, 2009

The first twenty seconds actually made this look promising. Nicely done art, an intriguing plot (a young guy's experience in the army), I was expecting something pretty interesting. But right away that got bogged down by everything else.

While I thought the initial character design was great, you can't just use the exact same look for every character (and changing the hair doesnt count.) The voices were also pretty similar to each other, maybe work on differentiating your voice acting a bit there, though it was otherwise good.

But worst of all, the pacing was god awful SLOW. Every little moment lasted about five times as long as it needed to, so there were many moments of just dead space. For instance when hes holding up his bag to "defend" himself from the sniper, he just stands there shaking for a solid fifteen seconds until the guy next to him finally chimes in. I feel like you're trying to make a comedic moment there, but it really falls flat. Maybe try working more with the camera, zooming and panning faster and more dramatically to guide the viewer along what you're trying to portray.

And finally, i dont think you can legitimately call it an episode if nothing actually happens in it. Again, it starts off looking as if its going somewhere, but once he lands, its just a string of attempted humor leading to an abrupt, inappropriate ending. By the end I feel like nothings been accomplished, aside from the base transfer which is really just the opening. In fact, when I finally feel like it's picking up some plot, it ends. And might i add, on a truly dumb and pointless ending. i think you're suggesting that the black haired guy is going to be a significant character, but you have to at least give us some reason to care about him if youre going to end it right there. Really, "hi there" is pretty far up there when it comes to dull last lines.

All that said, youre a great artist, a decent animator, and an okay writer. Just make it snappier, quicker, and, well, more interesting, and you should have something truly entertaining on your hands. And maybe get someone else to do the general's(?) voice acting. you can do pubescent kid, not stern superior.

Score: 2

"Interesting concept"

submission: NG Front Page: The Game

date: January 11, 2009

Ok, points for originality. but besides that? this is a suckfest. This could be totally cool if you actually made it a game instead of 'hey lets wander around pointlessly'. maybe have the character try to collect letters that are already on the page, so that the player is actually interacting with the front page. or maybe certain links become portals to different ng pages. oh and something along the lines of flying would be nice, so that once you fall to the bottom of the screen you can get back up if you want to. just give it a purpose, and actually do something with it, and this could be a pretty decent game.

Score: 8

"A bit disapointing"

submission: This Game is a Joke 2

date: January 8, 2009

Gotta admit, I loved the first one. Perfect mix of randomness, porn, and apathy (on your part). And this one was good too, i just miss some of the random stuff that made me laugh from the first one. like pointless puzzles, jokes (cock joke, its classic), etc. so yeah nice and all but bring some of the humor. oh and use even better porn if you can, the stuff here wasnt as great as the first.

Score: 10

"fuck youre awesome"

submission: Walmart Siblings

date: December 31, 2008

emily.... dear god emily, you.. are.. amazing.

what the fuck was this cartoon about? fuck if i know. you you know what? it was awesome. pure, disgusting, filthy, awesome. and i love it.

i dont understand you. i dont think anyone understands you. i dont know if you understand yourself. but none of that matters, because you rock my world.

this flash was epic in the most brain-bursting way that has ever been conceived. you are officially the shit.

Score: 8

"Wow great story, but really low quality drawings."

submission: Tales of Horror - Walter

date: December 18, 2008

I loved the story, very interesting and suspenseful, if perhaps a bit predictable at times. The story went slightly slower than I would've liked, especially since the drawings were extremely lacking, giving the viewer nothing much to look at while waiting for the next scene. Improve on your drawings, and you could be making some amazing flashes. Although I did like Walter's face quite a bit. and thats quite the juicy sound effect at the end. overall, nice job.

Score: 10

"superbly written"

submission: B&W Drama Theater #12

date: December 11, 2008

i believe you wrote somewhere that your intention in this black and white theater series was to develop your writing skills. well i must say if thats so, right here is proof that you reached that goal and then some. this is one of the most interesting, amusing, fascinating, human, well-written pieces of flash ive seen in a long time. this is not the first time ive watched it, but it hasnt lost any interest from me, and it really maintains the artistic sheen it had the first time. amazing job.

Score: 2

"You could really be making something good."

submission: Little Inspiration

date: December 3, 2008

This review is meant both for this movie and what I've seen of your work in general. You tend to pursue a subject matter or storyline that is of a more serious nature, relating to brutal deaths, childhood beatings, the horrible side of people, etc., but frequently try to turn it into a joke. I usually start off liking your flashes, like this one, getting drawn into the emotion of the flash and getting connected to the characters, but then you just completely ruin it by trying to make it humorous. While i could possibly see that being purposeful, like in this one, which turned just disgustingly depressing the instant the man fell, it really just screws with your audience in an unpleasant way. it makes most of your flashes much more difficult to enjoy. on the other hand, flashes like coffee break and ugly duck are BRILLIANT and sick and twisted in a very directed way. they start that way and they end that way, satisfying the viewer with exactly what they were expecting, yet shocking them all the same.
So please stick with those disturbing storylines, and just leave the attempted humor out of it. Youll go a lot farther, i promise you.